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Post by Abstract on Jun 30, 2005 11:04:43 GMT -5
I know there are many young poets out there (and some odler ones too!) and I invite them all to share their poetry with us.
If you critique someone's poem, please remember that they have feelings, and be kind! Use positive comments and polite criticism!
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Post by Abstract on Jul 2, 2005 21:06:20 GMT -5
I thought I'd post some of my own work.
Here's something I wrote when I was really sad.
I Mourn a Love That Never Was
Love for a night is better than none at all. Someone once told me that. To be close for awhile when you know you must part is better than never touching.
I wouldn't know I was never allowed in, never trusted enough. Never given love, nor allowed to give. I mourn a love that never was I can't help but wonder if it would have been better to know what I'm losing than to live asking what might have been but I live not knowing... Mourning a love that never was.
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Post by Abstract on Jul 14, 2005 21:17:57 GMT -5
Here's another of my own, this one is pretty old. It was actually published in an Anthology. (I know, it's not a big deal but I still feel cool that I can say that.)
By and By
By and by, not a word exchanged, for fear of a name that might come between us. One that already has, and nothing can change the way things are, but something changed the way they were, too bad it had to be her. Sometimes I see you in the hall, and sometimes I think you don't see me at all, and sometimes I wonder if you ever really cared. And by and by, not a word exchanged; for fear of the thing that made things change.
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Post by Abstract on Jul 14, 2005 22:04:35 GMT -5
Since I have some time right now, I think I'm going to post a few more poems.
It Rained Today
"I have a glass of water" "Yeah?" "uh huh" The lonely chatter of mother and daughter. Then the eerie silence, next, I notice the background sounds - commercials on TV a country song flits down the hallway sounds of stale conversation drift through the open door the boredom of a rainy day minutes immeasurable spent trying to get by.
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Post by Abstract on Jul 14, 2005 22:09:57 GMT -5
What I told the Moon
I said "Goodnight" to the moon tonight I haven't done it in so long I told the moon I missed her tonight I haven't seen her in weeks I told the moon to watch out for them Sometimes I think they need it I told the moon to protect me too Sometimes I am so young I told the moon I loved her tonight And I hoped I was not wrong
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Post by Abstract on Jul 14, 2005 22:32:06 GMT -5
I hope I don't burn anyone out on my own stuff... Since this one is longer, it's the last one for tonight.
High Expectations
I expected And waited I loved Then hated As fear grew, The flowers faded. Hope has died. And I've swallowed pride; Maybe I was wrong. Now I'm jaded. It's been so long A promise or two, Only a few, But they were broken. I've left the door open. I'll forgive you, Just walk back in It'll all be better then Broken hearts mend. They all say, "She's crazy" "She's changed" Maybe I have For the better. I know now. You'll come back, My hopes renewed, I'll wait again, Joy subdued, Love breeds pain, A fact all know. They say that "Flowers won't grow, If planted in snow" I've proved them wrong My heart so cold Eyes closed They are wrong. I'll go back Happy again Someday I'll stay that way Happy forever.
Begin again, A new trip here. What goes on, Is not clear. Heart's ache, Then break. Long time now So far away, Just a day. The storm brews. So near now. "What happens after?" Do you have my answer? No, you see, but will not say. You know, but I don't want to. Not really No Why? You'll see And hear You'll know Then share. Teach me again The mind forgets The soul remembered. Nothing ends forever, Repeat themselves, Over and over, Past mistakes And fears and hopes, A pattern, Can you escape? Break the chain Forget your pain Change the score, One more for us! What happens? The end? Maybe. Or something else?
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Post by Maverick on Jul 26, 2005 17:57:34 GMT -5
You are indeed a talented poet. Its a shame you havent gotten anyone else to write some poems in here. I might be able to put one of mine in but i dont have it memorized and I have to find it. Ill start looking.
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Post by Abstract on Jul 26, 2005 19:35:11 GMT -5
One Perfect Memory
One perfect memory kept crystal by my mind reliving it again. When everything was right, and you held me close... I'll wish always to go back; to rewind time and stay in those moments forever. Your greatest gift to me is this one perfect memory, that time we were together and you never let me go. You've touched me in ways you'll never know. You gave me one perfect gift that I'll never lose; one perfect night that I'll keep with me in my heart. One perfect memory that maybe time will touch, but this one perfect gift you gave me will never truly fade from memory. Nothing can take away my one perfect memory.
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