a lame poem by me

[poofacekilla]

“Sunrise on My Wall”

I have seen the sunrise,
The city at dawn.
With the reds and yellows,
The oranges and pinks.
And I sit, in peace, watching the sun rise.
Suddenly,
My peace is disrupted with the honking of horns,
Yelling of drivers.
So I begin to paint.
And once complete,
I can see the beautiful sunrise,
Day or night,
Rain or shine,
No matter the weather.
In the comfort of my own home,
Without the noise and disruption.


plz feel free to c&c this. i will post a better one later

[poofacekilla]

lol i guess no one likes my poem

[Abstract]

I liked it, I just wanted to wait until I had time to critique it properly!

[Abstract]

I really like this poem. It's simple and has a basic message that I can identify with.
I myself am a painter, so the references to painting, to capture something so you can keep it, I can understand that.
This is all in all a well done piece of work. I really liked it.